Rough cut 2

In this second rough cut I have added in the diegetic sound from the external microphone, which as you can hear makes a huge difference.

There are some problems I have encountered with sound. Firstly, for the flashback scene outside the train station, the external microphone picked up a lot of sounds from the windy weather. Therefore I have chosen to work with the sound on the camera, which i think is actually more successful. This just means that from now on I have to be careful when cutting between shot-reverse-shots to ensure speech doesn't get cut off. There is also one shot in the final scene that I do not have diegetic sound for, so for the moment i have kept in the sound from camera and will re-record the line of dialogue I need soon. 

While working through my second rough cut, I got some audience feedback from those in my class:

• Obviously, sound needs to be finished. As there is a mixture of locations and changing between sound on the camera and sound from the external mic, so that needs to be sorted
• the cinematography is really strong
• There are pauses in dialogue/ shots that can be shortened
• The beginning shot with the old camera was very successful and works well when setting the tone

Things I need to do/change:

• Re-record Liam's line of dialogue that was missed in the final scene
• Check sound levels throughout the film, that one line in the scene isn't dramatically louder than another
• Edit the colours/exposure for the flashback scene and the scene in the dark room
• I accidentally added in the sound from the camera as well as the external microphone. I need to take this out and just have the ext. mic. sound. 
• re-edit the flashback scene, we don't see Jack turn to face Rachel, which doesn't make sense. I need to use a different take when Jack does turn round instead. 
• Shorter gaps between dialogue in flashback, more snappy 
• Make sure the background noise flows under the dialogue in the final scene and the dark room scene
• re-edit the final shot of Rachel so that the focus is smooth