Rough cut 1

Here is the first rough cut of my short film. This is only using the sound from the camera, but the shots are all in order which gives me an idea of how the film now looks and feels. 

I'm really happy with how it looks overall, I think the dialogue flows well and the storyline follows through. The colour and lighting really helps to distinguish between different periods in their relationship, and I'm so happy with the acting performances throughout. 

Things I need to change for the second rough cut:

• Add in diegetic sound from external microphone
• Tighten up the editing; shorten some of the shots and gaps within dialogue
• re-edit the scene with Jack and Alfie, when Alfie gets up and lies down on the bed, and use the shot when he sits up again